Theres this emptiness reverberating within her. This emptiness, to its power, she has succumbed. It is the voice of her very mind and the song of her heart. The master and she the slave.
Star upon gallant star a wish is wished each night. When the moon is full; high in the sky do these wishes upon wind take flight. Yet aloud, should she ever dare, let these secrets be known, she risks the dreadful plight that they shall loose all merit and might.
By herself she lives dormant, from her true self shes locked away. No mirror or glass or picture has ever captured who she is to date. She is but a mere shadow of the person she had once known. A ghost roaming the halls, a ghost who longs for a home.
And though she is but lost, her mind she can never escaped. Forever condemned to a saddened mind state. And this is her confusion not knowing where she belongs. Not knowing what, for her, is right, and what can be frightfully wrong.
Is there another who thinks or feels the pain she feels? Is there another like her who isnt all too real? Who lives without complete life, who has died but is not dead. Whos confusion leave them wandering in a blizzard of dread? Is she but a dying race, a person forever alone? Without the hopeful hope of ever finding her true home?
Speak and she will listen. Invite her in and she will come. But these gestures are all mistaken, she is not a child who will play dumb. She longs for a union, a tie, a sort of bond. One sole invitation shall not melt her sadness to make her fond.
A true friend she wishes, a true friend indeed. One wholl see her expressions and one wholl take heed. A friend that she can love and know theres hope so true. That in a world of old, a friend found, to bring anew.
Hope is the thought that never fails to cast its single line. For it is hope that she depends on to bring her a friendship thats divine.
Danielle Fonseca © October 2007















Comments
I almost thought it was a poem and the format got mucked up. If it's supposed to be a poem with an unconventional format, it works okay, not sure how much I like it, since it looks like prose, but has a lot of moments where the rhyme and cadence are almost uniform. Not sure yet... I wanna help, but... *Zzzz*
As for how it struck me, I found it sweet and sad, and I like the slight turn for the positive it takes at the end, without being sugary. Nice effort for your return!
Since it's technically the 31st, Happy Hallow's Eve and I'll try and give a more apt reaction later.
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Me: I love you more than anything; more than tea or books.
Husband: Don't exaggerate.
but haha when you reread it i fixed it some well some of the mistakes i found anyway
but yeah it is suppose to have a sad tone but i didnt want to take it too far and sound too depressed lol.
and happy halloween to you too!!
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You Dream of things that are and ask Why.
I dream of things that never where and ask Why Not?
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